For presentation
(ramp isn't complete, glazing isn't precise and isn't as organic as I want it to be, staircase is a mess)
Collage
Parti
Approach
Driving Force
Plans
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Section
Renderings
Approach from the park
View from the river
Entering the lobby
Rollerblading space
Auditorium, Core, and Yoga spaces
Water activities area
In context
This latest iteration is disappointing. It feels that you have really taken a step back in development here. You have lost the organic quality that has made this project strong from the start. There was a quality, albeit underdeveloped, of perforations, solid to void, opaque to transparent. This is gone in lieu of the complete glazing enclosure. The first blush it appears to be a "high tech" project...somehting in the eschelon of Foster, Rogers, Grimshaw. However, that is never what you have been about in this exercise. Even the coloration that you choose for the renderings is too moody.
ReplyDeleteYour spaces, as indicated by the captions are not differentiated in any way. They just lack experiential quality. I think that the section is still not informing your process. It all goes hand in hand.
I have no quarrels with your presentation methodology on a whole. You have work and good momentum which allows you to play. Take that opportunity to actually give it one more iteration and recapture the essence of your intentions.
Thank you. I just updated the post; none of your points will become invalid after you see it, but still...
DeleteYou are astute, my friend. Look critically at your rendering. Would you like to go to this space to work out? Liken the exercize to the success or failure of a minimalist residence. There is stark and cold and there is simple and unadorned, yet still homey. This is still stark and cold. Look to the german theoretical writings on "umheimlich." There is potentially some perspective there.
DeleteWoww . You need to step back.
ReplyDeleteYou have spent a semester identifying a sensual route of activities. You have had a mystical look throughout the design process: water, the human body, organicity, materiality would trigger fantasy and create an experiential approach. The current enclosure definitely does not do it. The way in which the user is initiated in such a space, the way he/she moves or stands, the relation btw space and time, are important arguments you are loosing here.
Suddenly, the dipole between small scale spaces and bigger ones is lost. Every space is perceived somewhat similarly. Hierarchy is lost. This extreme of transparency subs tracts imagination the way you have been defining it so far. By hiding certain elements (solid/void relationship), the visitor will be given the opportunity to complete views by himself. There will be a "gap" allowing him to "intrude" and fill it with his presence and imagination.